Sunday, August 18, 2013

#8Sunday #SundaySnippets: Meifeng's Secret.




I've been working on a novella called "All Things Returned." It's the third part of a series called "Anton and Lenora",  which is the story of a clipper ship captain(Anton) and the woman he loves and marries, the daughter of  a wealthy ship owner (Lenora). It's a historical, set in San Francisco in 1852. This snippet is about the secondary characters--Lenora's sister in law, Meifeng,  has disclosed a secret she's kept from her husband.



“There was a carriage. We were overrun. They killed my maid and the driver. There were three men. When they finished, I wished they had killed me.” Her voice was even as the tick of a clock, betraying nothing but fact.

Edward turned away from her. “Three men,” he repeated, as though he could not trust the meaning of her words.


Book one, Sweet Lenora is currently available:
 Lenora Brewer’s family owns the largest shipyard in Salem Massachusetts and Lenora, as her father’s only living child, is given free rein to learn the business. When Lenora’s father is killed in a carriage accident, her relatives arrange a marriage to a wealthy investor who is rumored to have beaten his first wife to death. Lenora devises a scheme to stowaway on The Sweet Lenora, a ship named for her. 
The last thing Anton Boudreaux needs is a naïve young woman stowing away on his ship. The dark and daring captain has secrets of his own to protect.           
When Sweet Lenora encounters a dangerous storm off the coast of Brazil, Lenora and Anton find in each other the courage and tenacity to brave the elements. As their love for one another grows it becomes a force to be reckoned with—and it will be sorely tested.

Book two: To the Wind, is slated for release in October

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For more on Sweet Lenora please visit my website's Sweet Lenora page and the To the Wind page. 

22 comments:

  1. This sounds like a super read. Congrats on the upcoming release.

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  2. You played that scene very well. She tells him without saying the exact words. I like that her sentences are short, like she said it quick just to get it out. And his response is perfect, I think. Trying to absorb it. Great 8!

    (No snippet for me this week. :)

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  3. Oh no, very tense, a great excerpt. It makes me want to know more. This is a character with much to overcome.

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  4. Thanks Sharon. I think they'll work it out, but...

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  5. "His voice was even as the tick of a clock" shows me how lacking in emotion the voice is. Great snippet.

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    1. Thanks you, Rayne. She's disclosing something she'd rather not think about, so she tells it flat--I imagine it's easier that way.

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  6. I can't tell how he's going to take this---'badly' is a given, but I hope he doesn't blame her . . .

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    1. Yeah, badly. But he's a good guy, so he'll come around.

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  7. Quite a revelation for him to deal with, not to mention awful for her to live through and go on. An intense snippet today. Well done!

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  8. Exciting snippet. Edward wont take that lying down, I can feel his anger as he turns away from her, well hidden of course. Great 8.

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  9. I can really feel her pain under the terse description--and the subtext is excellently captured.

    That poor woman...

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  10. She must be really fighting internally to be speaking in this way.

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  11. Excellent snippet! I love the way the emotions are captured so subtly.

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  12. Wow. Intense and intriguing. Definitely makes me want to keep reading. Nicely done!

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  13. Oh my, so much emotion and hurt in so few words. Nice job!

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  14. I love this "Her voice was even as the tick of a clock" perfect description of someone reliving a traumatic event and repressing her external emotions, while dying inside.

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