I'm still working on part 3 of Anton and Lenora, All Things Returned. In this week's snippet, poor Lenora is in a bad way.
I managed as far as the end of Edward’s street. I could see the Norris house two doors down and I increased my stride, thinking myself close to my goal. A pain ripped through me, so strong it robbed me for a moment of my breath. It was followed by another and another, hard knots of pain coming in waves. I bent double as though to shelter my unborn child from these blows. I feared it more than the pain in my limbs, for I knew it for what it was.
“No,” I whispered as though the force of my will could stop what happened. My body ignored my pleas and the pains kept on.
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Book One--Sweet Lenora is currently available
Book Two--To the Wind is slated for release in October.
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Oh no...I hope she's far enough along...this makes me sad.
ReplyDeleteYeah, not a good moment for poor Lenora. Thanks for stopping by Millie.
DeleteOh my, shes going into labor. This could be very bad if she doesn't get somewhere quick!
ReplyDeleteCouple of typos though (in case you want to correct). I think the word "see" is missing from second sentence "I could ___ the Norris house two doors down..."
"I bent double as though I shelter my unborn child from these blows." sheltered, yes?
My eye skims stuff all the time in my own writing. :)
Intense scene though. I'm scared for her!
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Yikes! Thanks Cindy. It's true about skimming--luckily it's a WIP and there's still lots of time to fix things.
DeleteVery tense scene, leaves me hoping everything will be ok somehow. Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThanks Veronica.
DeleteHow terrifying! Childbirth is dangerous in any era, and this setting does not bode well for her baby!
ReplyDeleteSadly, it doesn't Sharon.
DeleteIntense!
ReplyDeleteThanks Willa!
DeleteAbout three sentences in, I started doing some long-forgotten Lamaze breathing . . . very intense scene!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sarah. I seem to remember that too...panting, wasn't there a whole lot of panting?
ReplyDeleteHow terrible to have her child in this setting. I fear for her child and for her. This isn't safe.
ReplyDeleteOh no! I hope it stops-
ReplyDelete~Summer
Nice analogy with her seeking to shield the baby from the pain.
ReplyDeleteGreat 8!
Oh, that's terrible, she needs to arrive quickly. Isn't anyone looking for her?
ReplyDeleteGreat description. And so close to her goal...
ReplyDeleteInteresting snippet. Can't wait to see if she gets to her goal.
ReplyDeleteYeah, you definitely convey a great sense of dread and fear. Thanks for sharing!
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