Sunday, July 28, 2013

#8Sunday#SnipSunday: The Road Not Taken

The Lilac Hour, my short story trilogy, was recently released. My snippet this week are the first lines of the third story, The Road Not Taken.



Who would have thought the past could find you at Target? I was in the small appliance aisle, coffee maker in my arms, staring at the other models featured and wondering what difference it could
possibly make to my life or David’s, when I heard his voice behind me.
“Jo?” I would have known the voice anywhere, the hint of gravel mixed with a smoky kind of sadness that seemed to carry the world. I spun around, coffee maker still in hand, and there he stood, Seth O’Connor, like a consignment from my past dropped off at my feet. He hadn’t changed much in the decade since I’d seen him last. Same heartbreaking brown eyes over hair that was just this side of messy and clashed with the camel hair coat, the tie poking out under the collar, the neatly pressed slacks and polished brown oxfords.
I was rendered speechless and stood open mouthed as   Seth took the coffee maker from me and put it into my empty cart.



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17 comments:

  1. Really nice beginning. This drew me right in and made me want to keep reading.

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  2. Uh oh...sounds like David should be worried!

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  3. I loved the detail, really felt like I was at Target. Maybe it's just me but I thought the "his" in that sentence referred to David's voice...I must need more tea LOL to wake up properly. Excellent excerpt!

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    1. Good catch, Veronica. It could be read that way. Hopefully, the sentence that comes after clears up the confusion. :)

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  4. Like last week, this pulled me in and made me want more. After I read last weeks snippet, I ordered the book, but never received it. I'd love to read it so if you can find out where it is and how I can get it, please let me know.

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    1. Thanks Rayne. I'm really sorry to hear you never got it! It should be up on Amazon (see the logo at the bottom of the blog) I don't know why, if you ordered it, it didn't come through. Shouldn't happen...

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  5. He seems like a very handsome Road Not Taken! ;)

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    1. *sigh* yeah. But maybe he wasn't the right road...

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  6. Love the 'consignment' line--it's a great visual. Nice description and tension!

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  7. The mundane transformed into surreal. Nice snippet!

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    1. Always surprising, what goes on at Target, Sharon. :)

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  8. If the most exciting thing in her life with David is the coffee maker she may be shopping for so etching else at Target. :) Nice snippet!

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    1. Ha! I don't think she's shopping around, Cindy, but...:)

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  9. Great scene. And haven't we all tried to decide which appliance to buy?

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